Can somebody check for me? thank you (part 3)更新中……

Before i study at college, i never stand in front of people and give a speech After 1-2 weeks of studying at college, our lecturer tells us, we will have a presentation, we need to prepare a presentation about the title of ' World Famous Entrepreneur'. Our lecturer  provide some guidelines to us, and we need to choose the entrepreneur as fast as possible, it is because if it is selected by others, you cant select it anymore.
I raise up my hand, and all the people look at me, suddenly i seem like the animals at the zoo. I asked our lecturer, may i select now? Sure, answered by our lecturer. So, I left my seat, and went in front to fill the form

I know by the time , my classmates are curious about who is the entrepreneur that i chosen.   They guess I am going to choose  Bill Gates, Steve jobs and etc. But actually i choose Robert kuok who is the richest man in Malaysia. After that, all the people are in a frenzy to select Bill Gates and Steve Jobs as their presentation topic . They seem like dont know any other entrepreneur except them.

After i made the decision, i can relax for a while. I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present.(不明白你想说什么) Therefore, i search Google, i surf all the information about Robert Kuok, no matter Chinese or English article. I cant find any information that is talking bad things about Robert Kuok. The Reasons why i decided to present him is Because he is my idol and I admire him all the time. He has a good sense of worth for doing his business, he says As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind.不明白

This is how i will correct your script

I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present- 不是很明白

我大概有个概念关于我要呈现怎样的presentation

"As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind."

哈哈，直译的后果~ 主要讲做生意要对的起良心，绝不做对不起良心的事。他说过胆量应该对生意，而不是对人，对人应该用的是度量~


谢谢哦~

主要讲做生意要对的起良心，绝不做对不起良心的事。他说过胆量应该对生意，而不是对人，对人应该用的是度量~

应该比较难翻译，我的能力只到这里哦：
We should always act with integrity in dealing with business. 后面那句我还是不明白，因为两个句子没有冲突矛盾的地方。难比较。

没关系，也是谢谢你哦~
我会不断更新，
有空进来看看~

好的 =）希望你的英文可以一直进步哦！

My First presentation experience（ part 2 ）
For preparing my presentation, I did a crazy thing to perform well on my presentation. I went to read a novel about him, the whole book is about 300pages. To prevent me missing any main points, i almost used 1 week to finish reading it. It is really making me more recognise about him, so I'm more confident to perform well. I also went to Youtube to see any videos about him, but his videos are too less, because he is a media-shy person, he doesn't like to be interviewed. Fortunately, he accepted to attend a dialogue TV programme in China recently, it is really rare.

Now everything's ok, but my next problem was also coming. Due to my poor English, I afraid that i cannot translate it from chinese to english very well. Therefore, I was starting to find the english's article about him, and glanced over his profile on Wikipedia. Due to different way different information, so i could not determine which is correct. Lastly, i decided to skip the unsure parts.

For the presentation, the time management is an art, it is important because if you are given 5 minutes to present it, but you have been presenting more than 5 minutes, the lecturer will have the right to stop. Instead, if you have done before the given time, it maybe seem like your points are not enough, so your mark will be lower. So, the concept of time is very important to let you get the extra mark. Some strict lecturers will not accept the part of exceeding the time given, so your concept may not be emphasized very well, it is wasting for your mark.

For my advice, use the rule of 8/2. Using the 80% of the given time to present, and using the 20% of the given time for the emergency. Some people may not know the presentation exists the potential mark which is for the Q&A section. Most of the lecturers will not tell you, but it still exists. At this time, the 20% of the given time can be using for the Q&A section. Hence, you match the time properly is also not the best way, because you may lose the mark of Q&A section. The best way is using the rule of 8/2, believe it or not?

to be continued~~

Before I went to college, I do not have the guts to face crowd in front of me to present. After 1-2 weeks in college, our lecturer told us, we need to  prepare a presentation about “ World Famous Entrepreneur’.
Our lecture provide us with some guideline, so that we can have a quick decision and to stood a fair chance among others.        I raised my hand up, all eyes shine on me, which made me look like a statue. I question my lecturer, may I select? Of course he told me. I left my seat and went to complete the form.
At that point of time, my classmates are curious which person I have choose. They guessed, either Bill Gates, Steve Jobs, etc. eventually I choose Robert Kuok wealthiest man in our country. A while past, everyone seems to have more interest to select Bill Gate and Steve Jobs. Their only general knowledge entrepreneur that are successful are only them.
After making my decision, slowing down my steps, I have a concept in my mind that I would like to note down. Therefore, I went online and google information about my entrepreneur, which came in both my dialogue article. No negative comments about Robert Kuok. So what is the reason I choose him?i admire him because of his career, what he have achieved along this years.  He has a objective in his business, as long as we have benevolent thoughts and never go against our conscience in our ways, we will have determined mindset.!

本帖最后由 lifeissianz 于 2013-4-25 07:24 PM 编辑


While preparing my presentation, I done an insane subject to present In my presentation. I read a novel about him, which consists of 300 pages. In order to retain all my important points, I had to complete it within a week. Understanding his background is a piece of cake, as I have confident to describe him well. I went online to view videos describing his success, but there are only a few videos, because he has less contact with media. Reluctantly he accepte to attend a dialogue TV programme which is  host by China media.
I felt confident, but there is certain trouble that concerns me. Due to my weakness in English, my translation from my mother tongue to English is not well. Therefore I start my steps searching for more related article about him, and have a glance over his individual pop folio on the net. Due to different information, I could not determine right and wrong. Lastly I decide to skip the unsure parts.
During presentation, time management served an important factor because time limit is only 5 minutes, any extension or least timing presented will caused us to lose marks. Time is an important factor to gain extra mark. Stricter lecturer will overlook the extra time presented, which in result wasting our effort.
Heed my advice, use rule 80/100. Head for 80% time to present well and the rest for back-up plan. Certain individual have no idea presentation part have potential mark for Q&A section. Majority of lecturer are selfish, but it exists. This point of time, 20% of the supplied time can be used for Q&A section. Hence, manage our time well is not our priority, because we may lose mark in Q&A section. The most effective way is to rule 8/2, trust me.

Cheers

Grammar mistakes everywhere.

本帖最后由 unknownhammie 于 2013-5-3 08:41 PM 编辑

I had never stand in front of people before I started my studies in college. After 1-2 weeks of studying in the college, my lecturer told us that we will have to prepare for a presentation on "World Famous Entrepreneur". My lecturer did provide us some guidelines, and we need to decide fast which entrepreneur to choose as an entrepreneur can only be selected once. I raised my hand and everyone was looking at me in an odd way. I asked my lecturer, "May I choose now?". "Sure", he answered. Therefore, I left my seat and went in front of the class to fill up the form.

At that time, I knew many of my classmates were curious about which entrepreneur that I chose. They might thought that I would be choosing Bill Gates and Steve Jobs. In fact, I chose Robert Kuok, the richest man in Malaysia. All my classmates were so into selecting Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, as if they didn't know any other entrepreneurs than both of them.

After I made the decision, I slowed down my steps. I almost have the whole picture of how well my presentation would be going like. Therefore, I searched all information in Google regardless Chinese or English articles. Surprisingly, I couldn't find any articles that contained negative comments of him. The reason why I chose him as a subject for my presentation was he is always my idol and I admire him much. He is a very successful man in business as his saying, "We should always act with integrity in dealing with business. Courage is used to deal with business not people. We must treat people with generosity."