Can somebody check for me? thank you (part 3)更新中……

本帖最后由 看不没有做 于 2013-5-12 08:46 PM 编辑

This article is my real own experience, i hope that i can share some experience and get some feedback from you, thank a lot

My First presentation experience(part 1)

Before i study at college, i never stand in front of people and then give a talk. After 1-2 weeks of studying at college, our lecturer tells us, we will have a presentation, we need to prepare a presentation about the title of ' World Famous Entrepreneur'. Our lecturer provides some guidelines to us, and we need to choose the entrepreneur as fast as possible, it is because if it is selected by others, you will not select it anymore.
I raise up my hand, and all the people look at me, suddenly i seem like the animals at the zoo. I ask our lecturer, may i select now? Sure, answered by our lecturer. So, I leave out of my seat, and go to in front to fill out the form.

I know at the time, my classmates are curious about who is the entrepreneur that i chosen.   They guess me choosing Bill Gates, Steve jobs and etc. But actually i choose Robert kuok who is the richest man in Malaysia. After that, all the people are crazy to select Bill Gates and Steve Jobs. They seem like dont know any other entrepreneur except them.

After i done the decision, i can slow down my steps for a while. I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present. Therefore, i go to ask Google, i surf all the information about Robert Kuok, no matter Chinese or English article. I cant find any information that is talking bad things about Robert Kuok. Reasons why i decided to present him? Because he is my idol, I admire him all the time. He has a good sense of worth for doing his business, he says As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind.

to be continued~~

Part 2

Part 3

After i done the decision
应该用made比较好，而且也不可以用done啦，did还可以

After i have made the decision， or
After i made the decision

ok, 受教了~ tq

i never stand in front of people and then give a talk ->  to give a talk

our lecturer tells us, we will have a presentation   -> tell us that we will be having a presentation

prepare a presentation about the title   -> on the title

Our lecturer provides some guidelines to us, and we need to choose the entrepreneur as fast as possible, it is because if it is selected by others, you will not select it anymore.
-> Our lecturer provided some guidelines to us. We must make our decision on which entrepreneur we will be presenting as soon as possible before take by others.

I raise up my hand -> i raised my hand

and all the people look at me, suddenly i seem like the animals at the zoo
-> everyone stared at me as if I am an animal at the zoo

I ask our lecturer-> i asked my lecturer

Sure, answered by our lecturer-> sure, he said

So, I leave out of my seat, and go to in front to fill out the form.
-> So i proceed to the front and fill up the form

I know at the time
->I knew at that time

who is the entrepreneur that i chosen.
->that i chose

They guess me choosing - > they figured i will choose

all the people are crazy to select- 不是很明白这句的意思

They seem like dont -> they seem like they do not

After i done the decision-> after i made my decision


I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present- 不是很明白

i go to ask Google, i surf all the information about Robert Kuok
-> i googled all the information about Robert Kuok

  I cant find any information that is talking bad things about Robert Kuok
->cant find any information that says bad things about Robert Kuok

Reasons why i decided to present him?
-> Why did i decide to present about him?/ Why did i chose him?

wow, you are so kind, thank you for your reply

all the people are crazy to select- 不是很明白这句的意思

很多人急着选择


I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present- 不是很明白

我大概有个概念关于我要呈现怎样的presentation


Ps: 我的英语让你贱笑了，我是想透过这个方式来改进我的英语，谢谢你让我有请进的动力

请问这是什么用途呢？学业用途吗？还是纯粹想用英文书写？

Before i study at college, i never stand in front of people and then give a talk.
>Before I started studying in college, I have never given a talk in front of crowd.

After 1-2 weeks of studying at college, our lecturer tells us, we will have a presentation, we need to prepare a presentation about the title of ' World Famous Entrepreneur'.
>After some time, our lecturer told us that we would be having a presentation on "World Famous Entrepreneur".

Our lecturer provides some guidelines to us, and we need to choose the entrepreneur as fast as possible, it is because if it is selected by others, you will not select it anymore.
>Our lecturer provided us some guidelines. We would need to choose the entrepreneur to present on as soon as possible as we would not be able to select the entrepreneur if he/she is selected by others.

I raise up my hand, and all the people look at me, suddenly i seem like the animals at the zoo. I ask our lecturer, may i select now? Sure, answered by our lecturer. So, I leave out of my seat, and go to in front to fill out the form.
>All my classmates were looking at me as if looking at an animal in the zoo. I asked the lecturer if I may select the topic now. "Sure", he said. So I went in front (the stage?) to fill in the form for that.

I know at the time, my classmates are curious about who is the entrepreneur that i chosen.   They guess me choosing Bill Gates, Steve jobs and etc. But actually i choose Robert kuok who is the richest man in Malaysia. After that, all the people are crazy to select Bill Gates and Steve Jobs. They seem like dont know any other entrepreneur except them.
>I knew, at that time, that my classmates were curious about the entrepreneur that I have chosen. They thought I would be choosing Bill Gates, Steve jobs and etc. Actually I chose Robert Kuok, the richest man in Malaysia. All of them were all into choosing Bill Gates and Steve Jobs as if they know none other entrepreneurs than these two people.

After i done the decision, i can slow down my steps for a while. I almost have a concept about how well the presentation i would like to present. Therefore, i go to ask Google, i surf all the information about Robert Kuok, no matter Chinese or English article.
>I could take my time to prepare for the presentation after deciding on the topic. I thought I know how to present this topic well. Therefore, I searched for all the information about Robert Kuok on Google.com, may it be in Mandarin or English language.

I cant find any information that is talking bad things about Robert Kuok. Reasons why i decided to present him? Because he is my idol, I admire him all the time. He has a good sense of worth for doing his business, he says As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind.
>I could not find any information that is against Robert Kuok. Reason why I decided to choose him as a topic for presentation? It is because he is my idol, I have always admire him. He has good business sense. He said, "As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind." (I dont understand this quote"

本帖最后由 看不没有做 于 2013-4-7 12:34 PM 编辑


没有什么用途啦，就是纯粹想用英文书写&分享我的presentation经验给一些学弟，
帮人之余也帮到自己~

"As long as we have benevolent thoughts and do not go against our conscience in our actions , we will be able to walk on with a determined mind." (I dont understand this quote"

哈哈，直译的后果~ 主要讲做生意要对的起良心，绝不做对不起良心的事。他说过胆量应该对生意，而不是对人，对人应该用的是度量~

谢谢

wow,你真的很用心哦，谢谢