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作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-10-24 06:06 PM
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作者: 电脑和我    时间: 2011-10-24 06:09 PM
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作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-10-24 07:10 PM
So sad. None wants to help me.
作者: wenchain92    时间: 2011-10-24 11:28 PM
A few weeks ago,there was a new student in my class.First day,he came in my class unexpectedly.All of us felt very shocked because there was no any news about him before.Unfortunately,it was a mid year exam on the day he became my classmate.I quite curious what his results will get.

  He was a person that did not like to talk.No one wants to talk with him too.Thus,I wish to make friend with him.I know the feeling of lonely and I did not want to see anyone else was suffering in it.

  'Hi',I say. (Should be I said) However,he did not reply me at all.He just lied on the table.As I expected,he was a kind of person that I was be.Did not like to talk with others,has no any friend and lack of confidence.I began to worry about him.I worried he will be bullied because his characteristic.

  Touch wood! I scolded non-stop at myself.It has been come true.He bullied by some students from E class.These students as bad as thugs,no one dared to offend them.I want to help him,but I was scared too actually.Suddenly,there was a mind flashed through my brain.I though of what my brother likes to say.As the saying goes:men proposes,God disposes.

  I scolded defiantly at those students.Those students stared at me.Afterwards,they ran toward at me.I felt my legs were numbless and cannot move at all.Meanwhile those students ran toward for me,I heard a sound that did not hear before.'Help!Help!',the sounds was near,but I could not know who the sound was as I was fainted.

  When I woke up,I found that the new student was not in the class.I asked Siew Lee where he was and I knew he was hospitalised.Siew Lee talked to me about the whole incidents. (About the incident) The new student was fought with those bullies because no one could help him and me.He shouted loudly for help but no one came to help.Lastly,Siew Lee rushed to the office and asked for help.

  I went to hospital to visit him in that evening.I felt very guilty to him.I want to help him but admitted him in hospital at last.However,when I approached to him in the ward,there was a smile on his face.

So far so good!
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-10-25 05:31 AM
回复 4# wenchain92


    I put this essay on the lowyatnet..They said it's rubbish
作者: 2012救世主    时间: 2011-10-25 10:58 AM
How old r u ? Primary school student writes better than u!
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-10-25 11:33 AM
回复 6# 2012救世主


    3岁!!!!可以了吗???
作者: 2012救世主    时间: 2011-10-25 11:38 AM
回复 7# MarsNg


    relax man! improve urself if u think ur knowledge stop at baby stage, dont insult urself instead by lowering ur age!
作者: XiiaO_QiAngel    时间: 2011-11-12 02:13 PM
老实说~ 这个 essay 我觉得,你的老师给的分数太高..
如果我是你的老师我大概会给28-30 左右
第一,我觉得故事不够精彩,太普通了
第二,语法上得错误不少
第三,有些词汇有得不太恰当
there was no any news about him before.
我觉得你应该说, there was no rumour/news about getting a new classmate before 比较恰当..
I quite curious应该改成 i was quite curious.
还有很多
第四, 有蛮多的tenses 你混淆了
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-11-12 02:48 PM
回复 9# XiiaO_QiAngel


    我知道,在英文论坛领教过了
作者: XiiaO_QiAngel    时间: 2011-11-12 02:50 PM
回复  XiiaO_QiAngel


    我知道,在英文论坛领教过了
MarsNg 发表于 2011-11-12 02:48 PM



    人都是从错误中学习的嘛
不要灰心

加油噢 !
作者: blankmaxi    时间: 2011-11-13 11:27 PM
You can easily get a B if you make sure your tenses and grammar are correct.
Though the story is not that interesting, you can still get a A if you can add some descriptions to your characters, how you felt etc.
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-14 12:20 PM
回复  XiiaO_QiAngel


    我知道,在英文论坛领教过了
MarsNg 发表于 2011-11-12 02:48 PM
哪里的英文论坛?怎么领教?
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-11-14 01:07 PM
回复 13# DejaVu26


    lowyat,被酸到很惨
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-14 04:15 PM
回复 14# MarsNg 给link来看一下...... 那里的英文也好不到哪里去,还酸人......哈哈
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-11-14 04:57 PM
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回复 15# DejaVu26


    是吗?有很多英文老师咧。。
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-14 05:44 PM
哈哈,天啊,那些取笑人的自己的英文也够烂的...... 老师的也不少语法错误......
我国的英语没得救了......
作者: AcerAlpha1    时间: 2011-11-14 09:25 PM
I can try to help you but I have to admit though that my English is not superb.
I'm not the best but I get A+'s in exams.
I'll try my best.
To those who are better than me, if you guys find any mistakes that I have made, I apologize.
Please do correct me

By the way:
red means wrong
blue in bracket means my corrections
green means words you should add in
orange means what I'm thinking


作者: AcerAlpha1    时间: 2011-11-14 09:26 PM
oh and underscores means words you should not have add in
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-15 08:55 AM
I know the feeling of lonely(loneliness)
=> I knew how lonely it felt...

because there was no any news (absolutely no news) about him before.
=> because we hadn't been told that there would be a new student in our class.

改不下去了,两个字:难改......
作者: AcerAlpha1    时间: 2011-11-15 08:05 PM
I know the feeling of lonely(loneliness)
=> I knew how lonely it felt...

because there was no an ...
DejaVu26 发表于 2011-11-15 08:55 AM



    aiyorh >.<
mine difficult to mark or his?
but a little helping hand does a lot of difference
thankiew!
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-15 08:34 PM
aiyorh >.<
mine difficult to mark or his?
but a little helping hand does a lot of differ ...
AcerAlpha1 发表于 2011-11-15 08:05 PM
她的会比较难改......她需要的是先把基础打好,这样改的话,她看了未必知道为什么,帮助不大,但改的人却很费时费神。
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-11-15 08:39 PM
回复 22# DejaVu26


    我考完spm再跟你请教吧
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-11-15 09:15 PM
回复  DejaVu26


    我考完spm再跟你请教吧
MarsNg 发表于 2011-11-15 08:39 PM
......OK......
作者: seachingppl    时间: 2011-11-18 10:25 PM
wow....so long
作者: seachingppl    时间: 2011-11-18 10:26 PM
I can laugh if my essay can write 150 words....haha
作者: m5970    时间: 2011-11-19 04:46 PM
[This is the narrative essay that given ending]

  A few weeks ago,there was a new student in my c ...
MarsNg 发表于 2011-10-24 06:06 PM



Your progression of ideas is weak and causes serious disruptions in the flow of the essay.
Read more to improve your grammar and writing skill.
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-12-8 07:36 PM
回复 24# DejaVu26


    Finally, I have finished my exam.  So, what 's my MAIN problem??
作者: DejaVu26    时间: 2011-12-9 10:04 AM
回复  DejaVu26
    Finally, I have finished my exam.  So, what 's my MAIN problem??
MarsNg 发表于 2011-12-8 07:36 PM
会用 have finished 应该还有希望,看这里很多连基本语法都搞不清楚,不少还是大学生......
努力加强自己的语法吧,这是经过努力和适当的方法就可以补救的......
最怕的是莫名其妙的认为语法不重要,外国人不在乎语法的想法,甚至强调自己很满意自己的程度,这些人其实在逃避,在自欺欺人......
别在乎Lxxyxxt那些人的批评,我浏览那个论坛的印象是大部分还是烂英语,没太大分别......
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-12-9 10:16 AM
回复 29# DejaVu26


    have+past particle嘛。。这我还懂@@至于lowyat的那些人我知道他们只是一群喜欢在网上骂人的喷子罢了。。
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-12-11 09:05 PM
回复 29# DejaVu26


    我想买muet的参考书来看,我知道中六的很难,不过没关系,主要是能助我提升英文造诣的我都可以尝试。。。。不然你有什么建议能让我在这几个月有效提升自己的英文能力??
作者: MarsNg    时间: 2011-12-14 07:10 AM
回复 29# DejaVu26


    Please reply ASAP. Thank you.
作者: 伊意而    时间: 2011-12-31 03:28 PM
you can do better ^^ all the best
作者: Grandreams    时间: 2012-2-20 06:44 PM
回复 31# MarsNg

muet的参考书哪里都有卖啊。
你什么时候考呢?

我觉得先攻listening会比较容易,因为那些参考书都有附送帮助 listening skill 的 CD。只要听习惯了那个CD里面的英语,考试的时候就不会有太大的问题了。
这样一来至少你的listening那个部分已经稳拿高分了。

接下来就跟朋友练习speaking skill 咯,平时交谈多用英语,让舌头在考试前习惯一下用英语
然后考试之前就跟你的组员商量好谁先讲,谁第二个讲。然后去查查看那种礼貌用词:eg. what do you think,candidate A?
总之要让那个discussion持续下去,不要有间断,就应该没问题了。

再来就是reading and writing,这个就要靠你自己的english proficiency了。加油!
作者: valeriano    时间: 2012-2-27 07:36 PM
You can do it!! =D good luck~ if can, read some story books and newspaper.. It really helps!




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